Land of Eden

Ello guys. This be my first thread(xept my intro one) So i decided to put a story i've been working on. It's called Land of Eden and it's about 4 kids and a grown up who get transported into a realm called the Land of Eden(i know it's bit cheesy, but read it, you'll like it).

Note:it's REALLY long(note the Capsed Really), and it's just 1/3s the planned story..xD

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http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2649240/1/Land_of_Eden
there it is. Sorry, but it was WAAAY to big to post it in here, even i cut it into 2 chapter pieces...xD
hope you read it, like it, and possibly comment on it..xD

Kolo this is the RP section ._.

hey dont blame me!SOMEBODY moved it here!i posted it in the fan fic forum!!!